Formal Letter
Subject: Self Introduction
Dear
Professor Brad Blackstone,
Thank you
for taking the time to read this letter.
I would
like to formally introduce myself as Chuan Tin San, from Effective
Communication tutorial class 5. The purpose of this letter is to enlighten you about
myself.
I am in my
first year, studying Sustainable Infrstructure Engineering (Land). In 2020, I graduated
from Ngee Ann polytechnic with a Diploma in Sustainable Urban Design and
Engineering, specialising in civil engineering.
My father, a construction engineer, brought
me along for site visits during my childhood, which cultivated my interest in Civil
Engineering. It was an eye-opening experience for me as I got to witness how a foundation of a building looks like, how the walls of a building are built up, etc. However, my mindset changed in Polytechnic. I was given the
opportunity to do my internship at LTA, where I was exposed to Singapore’s land
transport system. I was intrigued about how the system works. That is one of
the many reasons why I pursued my studies in land instead of building services.
One of my strengths
in communication is being vocal. I consider myself as an extrovert person who
is very outgoing and sociable. I do not hesitate in sharing my opinion or
standing up for what is right when needed, regardless for myself or my peers. However,
there is a downside to it. Being a vocal and an opinionated person might be too
straightforward to others, and I tend to be misunderstood occasionally.
On the
other hand, one of my weaknesses in communication is not being a good listener. I get
distracted easily or I tend to forget the conversation immediately. In
addition, I can be a selective listener. I will only pay attention to things
that I would want to hear and respond to topics that interest me.
Being hospitable
is one thing that makes me comparable. I can make friends with people from
different walks of life, regardless of age. I hope to be able to spread
positivity to everyone around me.
By the end
of this module, I hope to have some takeaways to improve my verbal
communication skills, be it writing or conversing in proper English. I wish to learn the proper sentence
structure, grammar, and learn abundance of vocabulary. I also aim to be a better
listener.
Before I
end off, I would like to thank you for making the lessons interesting and
meaningful.
Best regards,
Chuan Tin San
Edited: 01/10/2021
Commented on: Yusri, Din, Yu Xuan
At a glance this looks like an interesting read, Tin San. I'll give comments once your blogging buddies have done so.
ReplyDeleteTin San's letter is very intriguing as she adds a lot of personal touch to it. As a reader, I could empathize with her which is why this article was such a good read. In relation to the 7Cs of communication, this letter is clear in terms of content, and coherent in terms of how logical the flow is. All in all, her letter is well-structured and easy to comprehend.
ReplyDeleteGood day Din. Thank you for the kind comment!
DeleteHi Tin San,
ReplyDeleteI love how your letter is filled with examples despite the limited word count and that helps to give the reader a clearer picture of what you are trying to explain. However, I do feel that "My father brought me along for site visits" can be better elaborated as it is too abrupt. You can give some background info such as where does your dad work at or his role at the workplace would definitely help the reader understand better.
Other than that, the letter was pretty informative and I am glad to have met you in our first trimester in SIT. Here's to achieving our goals together by the end of this module!
Hi Faizal,
DeleteThank you for the comment and I've updated my blog accordingly!
It is a pleasure to have you as my classmate too!
Hi Tin San,
ReplyDeleteThank you for sharing about yourself.
Your letter is well-written as the structure is clear and the content is concise and interesting! The language use makes the letter easy to comprehend. I do appreciate if you can elaborate more on your interest in engineering.
I am so glad to know you in the first trimester and really hope that we can witness the growth of each other in SIT!
Best regards,
YX
Hi Yu Xuan,
DeleteThank you for the kind comment. I've updated my blog accordingly and hope that it allows you to learn more about my interest in engineering.
I am glad to know you in the first trimester too, and likewise, I hope we can witness the growth of each other!
Best regards,
Tin San
ReplyDeleteDear Tin San,
Thank you for this detailed and fluent letter. You’ve covered the scope of the assignment well and managed to demonstrate quite a bit about what makes you special. Among others points, we readers learn how your experience accompanying your father on work site trips and interning with LTA bolstered your interest in engineering. The first bit makes me curious: Is your dad an engineer? Was it easy for him totake you to work? How did it all make you feel?
In this essay, you also do an admirable job of explaining your comm skills strength, being sociable, and a perceived weakness, not being an attentive enough listener. These could be seen as two sides of the same coin. I appreciate your sharing the thoughts and yet wonder how you think you might be able to address the weak points. (Becoming a good listener will, in fact, be very important as we move to Zoom lessons.)
At the same time, in this letter you generally express yourself with fine language fluency, which makes reading it a pleasure. There are only a few minor issues:
1. sentence structure
-- I graduated from Ngee Ann Polytechnic with a Diploma in Sustainable Urban Design and Engineering, specialised in Civil Engineering. >
I graduated from Ngee Ann Polytechnic with a Diploma in Sustainable Urban Design and Engineering, specialising in Civil Engineering.
-- Be it writing and conversing in proper English, sentence structure, grammar, or learn abundance of vocabulary. > (fragment)
2. overuse of capitalization
-- in Civil Engineering. >
-- in Polytechnic >
-- Best Regards, >
I look forward to learning more from you as the term progresses.
Best wishes,
Brad
Dear Prof Brad,
DeleteThank you for the comment and feedback. I've made changes to my formal letter according to your comment.
I look forwards to learning more from you too as the term progress!
Best regards,
Tin San
Great effort, Tin San!
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